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October 15: B Day October 15, 2012

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1B

1. Tense work. All students then noted next to each scene title (or the start of each scene if you have no titles) which tense the scene is in, either PAST or PRESENT. Then, partners opened up the document and highlighted any verbs that were in the wrong tense for the author to change. If you were absent, you should write in your GoogleDrive document which tense each scene is in; then, double check to make sure each verb in the chapter is in that tense. If you’re having trouble with this, ask Ms. Garvoille in class or over email.

2. Creative Beginnings and Endings. Students received W4: Creative Beginnings and Endings. Students chose two beginning techniques to use in their memoir. They rewrote the beginning or added a new beginning to two chapters. If you were absent, you should download W4 and revise two beginnings using two of the techniques listed on the first page.

3. Work time. After students revised their beginnings, they continued writing their scenes.

HW: Revise two beginnings of chapters if you didn’t in class; be prepared to print out your whole rough draft of your memoir at the end of class on Wednesday or before you come to school Friday.

2AB

1. Freewrite. 

2. Extended metaphor. Students received L8: Similes and Metaphors. We worked through this sheet, starting with the song about similes and metaphors. It goes to Old McDonald: “Similes use like, as, than / Metaphors do not!” Then we worked on crafting an extended metaphor by setting up an organizing simile. If you were absent, download the worksheet and follow along, using one of the scenes from your memoir, either written or unwritten.

HW: Finish reading to the end of chapter 8 of your memoir book(s) by Wednesday; complete rough draft of memoir due in class on Wednesday. Tomorrow we will meet in room 404 for a last workday on our rough drafts.

4B

1. Freewrite.

2. “Not to be.” If you’re Hamlet, asking the question, “To be or not to be?” have faith! The answer is Not To Be, when you’re talking verbs, anyway.

Students had time in the computer lab today to revise their memoirs before receiving W5: Not To Be.

We took notes on this handout about how to remove To Be verbs from our writing when using 1) passive voice, 2) linking verbs, and 3) past progressive tense.

It’s okay to use was, were, is, are, etc. in dialogue and when you’re talking directly to the reader. But in many cases, we can eliminate those to be verbs by creatively rearranging the sentence or replacing the word with a more exciting verb.

Then students highlighted all the to be verbs in their memoirs so far and tried to revise as many sentences as possible to remove those verbs. It’s not that you have to take out all to be verbs–you should just ask yourself if there’s a better way of writing those sentences (and occasionally, there’s not).

3. Choose-your-own-adventure. For twenty minutes, students could 1) continue revising their memoirs on paper, 2) write a new scene for their memoir, or 3) read Into Thin Air or A Walk in the Woods.

4. Extended metaphor. Students received L8: Similes and Metaphors. We worked through this sheet, starting with the song about similes and metaphors. It goes to Old McDonald: “Similes use like, as, than / Metaphors do not!” Then we worked on crafting an extended metaphor by setting up an organizing simile. If you were absent, download the worksheet and follow along, using one of the scenes from your memoir, either written or unwritten.

HW: Finish reading to the end of chapter 8 of your memoir book(s) by Wednesday; complete rough draft of memoir by Friday. Wednesday we will meet in room 204 for a final workday on our rough drafts.

If you are going to be absent on Friday, finish your rough draft in GoogleDocs and Ms. Garvoille will check them to give you feedback online.

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